Please tell me if the essay needs to be longer...places where i can improve...and rate it the essay highlighting the errors... Do i need to describe the influence of another person...like my father for eg.???
Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.
The most influential person in my life has ensured that as I shoot for the moon, I don't get caught up staring at the stars. Her presence meant that I always had someone to look up to, a shoulder to cry on, and someone who I could ask for advice without hesitation. This person means the world to me. She is none other than my mother, my faithful guide and companion right from the moment I was born.
My mother has always been my greatest supporter. She taught me that hard work is like a vector quantity. It needs not only magnitude but also proper direction. She is the first to recognise any of my talents and encourage me to hone them. Unlike many Indian parents who just want their children to accomplish academic success, my mother wants me to be unique. She supports me in everything I want to do as long as I have an appropriate reason. It is only when she feels that she feels that something isn't in my best interests that she advices me against it. Even then, she leaves the final decision to me.
My mother made me cultivate the habit of reading right from an early age. Every time I performed well in academics or in extra-curricular activities, she would buy me new books, ranging from short exciting novels to books that increased my knowledge. On a slightly different note, my mother is the world's greatest listener. She listens carefully to each thing I tell her such as my problems, plans for the future and even trivial things such as things that happened at school and offers me the best pieces of advice.
My mother made me realize that everyone makes mistakes but that mistakes aren't meant to be repeated. I remember the time when I performed poorly in my mathematics examination in the 10th grade. Math had been my strong subject until then, but I had been over confident before the exam and hadn't revised properly, and this lead to a bad score. I was extremely scared when I brought my corrected answer sheet home, fearing that my mother would punish me, but her reaction mildly surprised me. Instead of admonishing me, she carefully analyzed my paper, and pointed out the concepts I needed to work on. She also made me reflect on the time I had wasted before the exam and asked me to tell her frankly if I thought I had given my best. I was unable to answer. I had learnt my lesson. I would never disappoint her again. Over the next month, she put in a lot of efforts to help me get my basic concepts right. All our hard work bore fruit as I cleared the class X board exam as the school topper and scored 99% in math.
My mother has always been there to share both my happiest moments and saddest memories. She taught me that happiness can be found, even in the darkest of times, if only one remembers to turn on the light. She has truly been the most influential person in my life. She has been my best friend, my source of inspiration, my guide and mentor. I look up to her with love, trust and pride.
My mother made me realiserealize that everyone makes mistakes but thatthose mistakes aren't meant to be repeated.
Instead of admonishing me, she carefully analysedanalyzed my paper, and pointed ...
I had learnt learned my lesson.
This is a good start, although I feel you should elaborate it more. You don't have to include your father if you are only speaking about your mother. The middle paragraph is to condensed. Please re read it over, I am not the best essay writer, but I have corrected some words that were written wrong.
With these types of topics, you can't go wrong on how a person has made a significance on your life. Please express it more though, your mom must have been there for you in other times other then assisting you with your math problems.
My mother, for whom I have a very deep respect in my heart, has a most hard working nature. She rises before any other member of the family and goes to bed last of all. She gets up at four early in the four early in the morning and after attending to the call of nature; she takes her bath in cold water whether it is winter or summer. Then she offers prayers to God. By this time, other members of the family also begin to rise. My father is the first amongst them. Gradually my brothers and sisters all get up.
My mother’s first care is to prepare my younger brother, Mohan and younger sister, Kala, for school. She gives them a bath, dresses their hair and clothes them. Then she prepares refreshment which consists of milk and snacks or some other combination. As my father goes to office at 9:30 a.m. my mother has to prepare meals for him early in time. We are not rich enough to afford a servant. So my mother has to go through all the work of the house from sweeping the floor to clearing the utensils. She washes the clothes and irons them also. She does a lot of sewing work also. Our shirt and trousers are mostly made by her. She also knits our sweaters and pull over’s to be used in winter.
My mother has a religious bent of mind. She observes a fast on religious occasions and spends quite a good deal of time in reading Holy books. Sometimes she reads out excerpts from the Ramayana or the Mahabharata or some other such book to us. Her life is an example of hard work and devotion. Under her guidance and inspiration, we find a new zeal in life. All of us, brothers and sisters, have learnt from her to make a proper use of our time and avoid bad company. She has taught us to avoid the use of indecent language. We have been taught to be courteous and polite to others.
My mother takes us with her when she goes to attend social functions like marriages or birthday parties. She loves me very much and at times, imparts advice to me. When she goes out for shopping, I am sometimes with her and she buys me things of my choice. Father has great respected for the care and patience with which mother keeps the family. I fact, my mother is the pillar of the structure of household life. If she is out of the house even for a day, we feel very sad and uneasy.
At night after supper the whole family assembles for general talks and discussion’s although my father is much more educated than my mother, she is the centre of family meetings and she shows extra ordinary ability in discussing a point. She is so wise that everybody has to respect her viewpoint. Sometimes she relates very interesting stories and the account of the experiences of her childhood is worth hearing.