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Noughts And Crosses Essay

Noughts and Crosses

‘Noughts and Crosses” by Malorie Blackman is a novel which follows the lives and experiences of two characters, Callum and Sephy. Throughout the book Blackman deals with a number of issues including relationships, alcohol abuse, power abuse, depression and violence. However, the key issues of the book are racism and prejudice. These issues of racism and prejudice are conveyed through the narrative techniques of characterization, point of view, language, structure and setting.

The author uses language as a tool to show the characters’ status in society as black or white. Various language techniques are used to display the classes of society. The words “blanker” (used by blacks to describe whites) and “dagger” (used by whites to describe blacks) are used repeatedly throughout the novel. This use of language reflects the intolerant attitudes towards one another in Blackman’s radical world. There is a significant amount of symbolism used in these words. “Blanker” is used to describe a blank, worthless, brainless white person. And “dagger” is used to depict a weapon that is capable of scratching and severing, reducing and disconnecting a person, or even bringing them to an end completely. “ I bet it was one of her blanker friends, they’re blank by name and blank by nature”. Through the difference of educated, formal language used by Crosses and the sometimes tasteless, simple language of the noughts, the reader can see the grades in which noughts and Crosses are separately classed. Through this technique I believe Blackman is trying to show the extent to which racism can affect people. It can lessen, degrade and have heavy social affects on a person proving where they belong and what they will never be.

The language is also used to emphasize the feelings and emotions of Callum and Sephy. The use of descriptive writing is employed by Blackman to give the reader insight into the effects and emotions of racism. “I was talking like my mouth was full of stones – and sharp jagged ones at that.” The book is full of descriptive writing and figurative language with use of similes and metaphors to explore the feelings of Callum and Sephy. The way in which Blackman uses these language techniques influences the reader to especially pity the white race and the way they are treated in the book. Blackman has created her own world to resemble our own oppositely and by us pitying the noughts in the novel, the white reader really empathizes to pity blacks in our society.

The setting is essential in highlighting the severity of racism in the world Blackman has created. The reader realizes that racism is apparent in the society in which Callum and Sephy live but it is not until Callum is given the rare opportunity to attend a Cross school that we see the extent of discrimination and intolerance towards noughts which commonly occurs. The merging of noughts and Crosses changes the setting completely, throwing the reader directly into conflict....

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Posted: 29 Oct 11 (11:46)    Post subject:

hey could you please read over my essay and give me some feed back on how to improve and what you think
thanks so much!

Submitted three times accidentally. Looking at this now. Feedback in the forum a bit further down shortly. ET12

Essay Question: Describe at least one character or individual you enjoyed reading about in the text(s). Explain why the character(s) or individual(s) helped you understand an idea in the text(s).

In the novel Noughts and Crosses, Malorie Blackman completely reverses the stereotype of whites having more power to coloured people. Stephy and Callum were characters from the text which I enjoyed reading about. These two characters helped the reader understand the idea in the text, societal views can impact on relationships as they showed the reader in many ways how their relationship changed as a result from societal views and also how they changed as individuals.
Throughout the novel, society around Callum and Stephy echoed the view that noughts and crosses shouldn’t mix and this made their relationship very difficult as they had to keep it a secret. “Noughts and crosses shouldn’t be seen together, crosses and noughts shouldn’t be friends, crosses and Noughts shouldn’t even be on the same planet as each other?. When Sephy decided to sit at the ‘blankers’ table with Callum at school, her Nought friends turned their backs on her making life hard for Sephy as she felt she couldn’t do anything right. “Choose your friends carefully. If you don’t stay away from lose blankers, you’ll find you don’t have a single friend left in this school?. This dialogue from the school scene relates to how Sephy was being affected by society and who she should be friends with. Sephy in this situation helped the reader to understand the idea in the text; societal views can impact on relationship because she was being torn between her friends simply from being an individual and doing what she believed in. Societal views that noughts and crosses shouldn’t mix were impacting on Sephy’s relationship with both Callum and her nought friends and she had to make a choice. By this, Blackman intended to show the reader that it is important to keep a mind of our own, we must make decisions for ourselves like Sephy did, which showed the reader how she was a true and honest character.
Callum was a character I enjoyed reading about in Blackman’s novel because he helped the reader understand the idea in the text as societal views changed him as an individual. Callum was an emotional young boy with feelings for his best friend Sephy, but as he grew older and more mature he became aware of society’s negative views and opinions towards his race and this changed him as an individual where he joined the liberation Militia and became heartless. “Conformation, if I needed any that I was dead inside?. Callum turned to the liberation militia for a sense of belonging, as after hearing society’s views about Noughts and Crosses mixing, he felt worthless and this impacted his relationship with Sephy as he left her as well as his feelings for her. “By the time I was 19; I had gained my stripes and lost my soul?. This quote from the text emphasizes that because of societal views, Callum became heartless and this impacted on his relationship with Sephy, as they drifted apart. This shows how important treating people with equality is, as it is not fair to leave people and different races out as they can feel unwanted just like Callum did, which resulted in him changing into a dull and heartless person, simply by how he was treated by society.
Callum and Sephys relationship was not easy in their world, where nought and crosses simply didn’t mix and Callum showed the reader this where at the end of the novel, despite his loving relationship and feelings for Sephy, he bowed down to society and their negative opinions and sacrificed himself. “I’m not ashamed of who I am anymore, but I’m not prepared to live in a world where what I am good enough?. This quote from the end of the novel supports how Callum was feeling and how society was affecting his life immensely as he felt unwanted and not good enough for anyone. Callum helped the reader understand the idea in the text, as despite all the good things that were happening in his life and his strong relationship with Sephy, societal views were too powerful and he could not stand up to them anymore. Blackman wanted the reader to think about racism and how important it is to not judge a book by its cover like Callum was. Simply because of his race and skin colour (appearance) he was classed as unworthy and unwanted by society but no one really took the time to get to know his personality and realise the good person he really was. Sometimes it pays to step out of the norm and take the time to get to know others before they are judged.
In conclusion Malorie Blackman’s novel, Noughts and Crosses was a superb book which described the true reality of a racially mixed relationship and how society influenced it. I enjoyed reading about the characters Callum and Sephy as they both helped me understand the idea from the text, societal views can impact on relationship. They helped me understand the idea through quotes from the texts and different situations the characters went through involving society’s opinions and how they reacted to these situations which impacted on their relationship in many ways. Throughout the novel, Blackmans message was portrayed through the idea in the novel by enforcing how important it is to treat others with equality.
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Posted: 29 Oct 11 (13:01)    Post subject:

Thanks for your patience 1995.

I like this novel myself so enjoyed reading your personal response. I've struggled to reattach your essay so have had to post your essay with some suggestions for improvement. Unfortunately couldn't get these to go to a different colour - so please read carefully and note the changes! Mostly these concern the structure. Your introduction needed a little more information in it. You are balancing evidence well with the need to make a personal connection with the text.
I hope this is helpful.
Keep up the good work.
ET12.

In the novel Noughts and Crosses, Malorie Blackman presents the idea of prejudice, social inequality and distrust because of colour. It is effectively handled with Blackman completely reversing the stereotype of whites having more power to coloured people. Stephy and Callum were characters from the text which I enjoyed reading about. Sephy is a Cross - a member of the dark-skinned ruling class. Callum is a nought - a 'colourless' member of the underclass who were once slaves to the Crosses. The two have been friends since early childhood. These two characters helped the reader understand the idea that societal views can impact on relationships.

It doesn’t hurt to give a little bit of basic character/plot information
Deleted the end of the paragraph as you are just repeating yourself
Make sure you write in present tense for literary essays
I haven’t changed all the verbs – just a couple to show you – you will need to do the rest


Throughout the novel, society around Callum and Stephy echoes the view that noughts and crosses shouldn’t mix and this makes their relationship very difficult as they had to keep it a secret. Callum is the first nought to go to a cross school. This sets up the conflict in the novel. “Noughts and crosses shouldn’t be seen together, crosses and noughts shouldn’t be friends, crosses and Noughts shouldn’t even be on the same planet as each other? says ? . When Sephy decided to sit at the ‘blankers’ table with Callum at school, her Nought friends turned their backs on her making life hard for Sephy as she felt she couldn’t do anything right. “Choose your friends carefully. If you don’t stay away from lose blankers, you’ll find you don’t have a single friend left in this school?. This dialogue from the students show school scene relates to how Sephy was being affected by society’s restrictions and prejudice about and who she should be friends with. Sephy’s situation helps the in this situation helped the reader to understand how the idea in the text; societal views can impact on relationship. She because she wais being torn between her friends because she simply from being an individual and doing believes it is all right to treat noughts the same as crosses. She is forced what she believed in. Societal views that noughts and crosses shouldn’t mix were impacting on Sephy’s relationship with both Callum and her nought friends and she had to make a choice. By this, Blackman intendsed to show the reader that it is important to keep a mind of our own, we must make decisions for ourselves like Sephy did, which showed the reader how she was a true and honest character. Blackman is also pointing out that prejudice is wrong.

Callum was a character I enjoyed reading about in Blackman’s novel because he helps me ed the reader understand the idea in the text as realise how societal views changed him as an individual. Callum iwas an emotional young boy with feelings for his best friend Sephy, but as he grows grew older and more mature he becomes came aware of society’s negative views and opinions towards his race. Initially trying to integrate for acceptance at Sophy’s school, he finds himself excluded because of his race and and this changesd him and as an individual where he joinsed the liberation Militia and became heartless. “Confiormation, if I needed any that I was dead inside?. Callum turned to the liberation militia for a sense of belonging, as after hearing society’s views about Noughts and Crosses mixing, he felt worthless. This and this impacted his relationship with Sephy as he left her as well as his feelings for her. “By the time I was 19; I had gained my stripes and lost my soul?. This quote from the text emphasizes that because of societal views, Callum became heartless and this impacted on his relationship with Sephy, as they drifted apart. This shows how important treating people with equality is. , as it is not fair to leave people and different races out as they can feel unwanted just like Callum did, which resulted in him changing into a dull and heartless person, simply by how he was treated by society.

Callum and Sephy’s relationship was not easy in their world, where nought and crosses simply didn’t mix. and Callum showed the reader this where at the end of the novel, despite his loving relationship and feelings for Sephy, he bowed down to society and their negative opinions and sacrificed himself. “I’m not ashamed of who I am anymore, but I’m not prepared to live in a world where what I am good enough?. Callum’s words This quote from the end of the novel supports how he Callum was feeling and how society was affecting his life immensely as he felt unwanted and not good enough for anyone. Callum helped the reader understand the idea in the text, as despite all the good things that were happening in his life and his strong relationship with Sephy, societal views were too powerful and he could not stand up to them anymore. Blackman wanted the reader to think about racism and how important it is to not judge a book by its cover like Callum was. Simply because of his race and skin colour (appearance) Callum he was classed as unworthy and unwanted by society but no one really took the time to get to know his personality and realise the good person he really was. Sometimes it pays to step out of the norm and take the time to get to know others before they are judged.


You really don’t need to keep repeating this phrase – we understand what you are writing about does answer the question

In conclusion Malorie Blackman’s novel, Noughts and Crosses was a superb book which described the true reality of a racially mixed relationship and how society influenced it. I enjoyed reading about the characters Callum and Sephy as they both helped me understand the idea from the text, societal views can impact on relationship. They helped me understand the idea through reversal of the stereotype, their words, actions, reactions and relationship change. quotes from the texts and different situations the characters went through involving society’s opinions and how they reacted to these situations which impacted on their relationship in many ways. Throughout the novel, Blackmans message is that was portrayed through the idea in the novel by enforcing how it is important it is to treat others with equality.
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Posted: 29 Oct 11 (14:44)    Post subject: The Hobbit - Essay

Hi ETs,
Could you look at my essay and give some feedback please.
Thanks,
Sarah

Looking at it now
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Posted: 30 Oct 11 (20:03)    Post subject: Essay checking

Hi
this is an essay can u please check it for me and give me and informative mark. thank's
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ET8What was an interesting idea in your chosen text? Why was it interesting?

In the play ‘Romeo and Juliet’ by Shakespeare an idea that I found interesting was the idea of love. There are many different types of love in the play but the main three I found interesting were Platonic love, Romantic love and Parental love. Platonic love is between friends, Romantic love is between parents/guardians and child.

Platonic love is between friends or cousins, a platonic relationship in ‘Romeo and Juliet’ is the between Romeo and Mercutio. An important factor that makes there love so strong is that they are both from the Capulet household. As a result of them both being from the house of Capulet they both support and encourage each other greatly, this is shown in the play when Mercutio advices Romeo to “be rough with love, prick love for pricking, and beat love down? during the time he was suffering from the breakup with Rosaline. Another example that supports Romeo and Mercutio have a strong and supportive love is when Romeo kills is new cousin Tybalt to avenge Mercutio’s death. This shows that platonic love in general can be a strong attachment and when broken can cause people to become emotionally unstable and do immoral actives. I found this interesting as it added to the dramatic action in the play. It also helped me realise important friends in my life who like Mercutio support and encourage me.

The relationship between Romeo and Juliet depicted Romantic love. Romeo was a seventeen year old boy who was handsome, intelligent, sensitive yet impulsive and immature. Juliet was a thirteen years old girl who was naïve and had little knowledge about love and marriage. Romeo and Juliet both fell in ‘love at first sight’ which makes us doubt that the love between them is real. Despite this their love blossomed quickly, and became strong and passionate. The relationship became very problematic for them and others around them as they were courting without the acknowledgement of their parents who were from funding families. In spite of the feud between the Motegues and Capulets Romeo went to Juliet’s room to see her. They would meet on Juliet’s balcony and he would want to “smooth a rough touch with a tender kiss?. Throughout the play the relationship helps Romeo and Juliet to grow and mature. Due to their forbidden love conflict and fighting builds up around them. I found this type of love interesting as it was the structure for the play which lead to the climax of the play and may have also ended the fund between the feuding families. It also helped me realize that Romantic love is the pure nature for a relationship and that it can affect not only the people in love but the people around them.

A different nature of love in the play ‘Romeo and Juliet’ is Parental love this is shown through the relationship between Romeo and Friar Lawrence. The love between them is protective and supportive. Friar Lawrence helps and guides Romeo in times of trouble. An example in the play is when Romeo tells Friar Lawrence he is love with Juliet and they want to get married. He believes “Happiness courts there in her best array …. Thou pouts’ upon thy fortune and thy love?. As a result Friar Lawrence being a friend to both Romeo and Juliet was Kind, civic-minded, a proponent of moderation, and always ready with a plan. Friar Lawrence secretly married the impassioned lovers in hope that the union might eventually bring peace to Verona and the lovers. Friar Lawrence was willing to help no matter the lost and risk and Romeo always goes to Friar Lawrence for help. This shows that Parental love is a strong guiding love that can change people’s lives for the better. I found this love interesting as it caused the climax where Romeo and Juliet died and also may have ended to feud between two families. It also helped me think about Parental love in my life and how my parents have guided and protected me through life. We all have someone in our lives that help us, love us and guide us this is called Parental love.

In conclusion there were many different types of love in the play ‘Romeo and Juliet, the one that was most interesting was the idea of love. There were three different relationships in the play and portrayed three different types of love. These were Platonic love, Parental love, and Romantic love all these were interesting and helped us understand how love affected the play and how these types of love affects us by letting us grow and mature.
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Posted: 30 Oct 11 (20:46)    Post subject:

Hi there Bernie96

You have a well structured essay here and you have covered the describe part of the question in detail, however, you have not really explained the importance in a lot of detail. In each paragraph it is really only one sentence.

You may find it easier to focus on one type of love and discuss 2 or 3 reasons why that type of love is important in the play.

I hope that is of some help,
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Posted: 31 Oct 11 (14:39)    Post subject:

wasup my bro english teachaz. dis ma s a for the bok the hunger games. i would apreciate it if it was looked over thanxxxxxxx

I am having a look at it now.
ET8

I have put some comments on your essay that I hope you will find helpful.

All the best,
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Posted: 31 Oct 11 (16:12)    Post subject:

hi, heres my essay on the question 'describe at least one character or individual from whom you learnt something in the text. Explain why you learnt somehting from this character.' please comment

Hi there,

I have put some comments on your essay. Don't forget to provide specific evidence from your text in each body paragraph.

All the best,
ET8

In Mark Haddons novel ‘the Curious Incident of the Dog in the Night Time’, a character who I learned something from was Christopher Boone, from whom I learnt about Aspergers. What did you learn about Aspergers? Why I learnt this was because Christopher is the character with the disability.

I learnt about Aspergers from Christopher; Aspergers is a condition on the Autism spectrum, it is a high-functioning version of Autism, which means he can understand maths and science exceptionally well. Another positive from his condition is his memory- he has photographic memory. He says- “Whenever I want to remember something it is like pushing a rewind button in my head, I just rewind to what I want to remember and replay it in my head.? Although there are positives of Autism, there are some big negatives as well, the most significant one being his misunderstanding of other peoples expressions. His mentor, Siobhan has to draw diagrams for him that link people’s expressions to their emotions. He has to take out his diagrams and match people’s expressions to the diagrams for him to know what it means.Why do you think Christopher is presented like this in the novel?

I learnt about Aspergers from Christopher because he is the character with the condition and because the story is written from his point of view in first person narrative. This means that I knew all Christopher’s thoughts and emotions, which is how I learnt about Autism. Why was that important? If the story was from someone else’s point of view I would not have learnt as much. How do we feel about Christopher? How does narrative point of view influence this? For example- when Christopher is talking about his misunderstanding of lies, I would not have learnt why he can’t tell lies if the story had been from someone else’s point of view. This is because it is something only Christopher knows. And how did this make you feel?

In conclusion, I learnt a lot about the effects, positives and negatives,Have you talked about these things in your essay? of Aspergers from the character Christopher Boone, why I learnt these things was because the story was written from Christopher’s point of view in first person narrative style, and he is the character with the condition.
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Posted: 1 Nov 11 (20:59)    Post subject:

hi i wrote an essay on the question
Describe at least ONE character or individual you enjoyed reading about in the text(s).
Explain why the character(s) or individual(s) helped you understand an idea in the text(s).

wondering if you could check and reply.

Hi popopopo

I am having a look at your essays now,
Et8

ps. do i need to write another para to get higher than achieved?

You have definitely discussed the friendship between Lennie and George in detail in both essays but you have not explained what its purpose is in the novel
if so can you also check my other essay
thanks
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Posted: 1 Nov 11 (22:13)    Post subject: Is this a good idea?

Am learning key points for my essays so in the exam if I get questions for eg.

Visual Written

setting change
event character
idea idea
character event

I will be able to answer them. Do you think its a good exam technique?

Don't forget to think about the connection between each technique and the theme(s) of your text ET8

Thanks...
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Posted: 2 Nov 11 (17:59)    Post subject:

Hi ET. I'm writing an essay for Animal Farm Eglish. NCEA lv 1.

Can you have a look over it and give me some ideas please.

Welcome to Studyit, Please make sure you read this Level 1 English forum, especially numbers 8 and 9.

I am having a look at your essay now,
ET8

Hi Matt Smith

I have written some comments on your essay that I hope will be helpful.
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Posted: 2 Nov 11 (19:12)    Post subject: My Essay

Level 1.
Describe at least ONE important relationship in the text. Explain why the relationship helped you understand an important idea in the text. Discuss visual/verbal features in your response.Oops, You have submitted this essay in the wrong thread.

"They were Mark and Vanessa Lorring, and they were beautiful even in black and white." We see the relationship of Vanessa and Mark through Juno's eyes and we see that they look like a beautiful couple that are down to earth. Vanessa and Mark Lorring have a very important relationship in Juno directed by Jason Reitman. Their relationship demonstrates important idea such as don not rely on first impressions. This idea was conveyed through the use of dialogue and camera shots.

In the first scene we hear about Vanessa and Mark there is a voice-over of Juno saying "They were Mark and Vanessa Lorring, and they were beautiful even in black and white." Which makes us think that they are perfect candidates for Juno's baby. Our expectations are met, as an audience, when their is camera shots of big, flash houses, getting even more impressive as we progress to the Lorrings house. The visual features of camera shots are used effectively because they zoom in on the Lorrings immaculate house. We see a shot of Mark and Vanessa presented in impressive clothes and we think the baby would be lucky to live here! Our first impression of Vanessa and Mark's relationship is very 'off' - we thought their relationship was perfect like their house. Later on we see that this is far from the truth as they get a divorce. Jason Reitman's purpose for having these specific camera shots were to emphasize the idea that we should not rely on first impressions although we do. In wider society almost everyone judges and first impressions are everything, but in Juno we see what Vanessa is truly like (nice, patient and passionate) only after we get to know her which is why this is an important idea.

Dialogue helps the audience decide how we feel about Vanessa and Mark. Their relationship develops further in the scene where they are deciding what colour to paint the nursery. Vanessa is deciding between two yellow colours because it is a "neutral gender colour." Mark says "The baby isn't going to storm in and demand desert-coloured walls." As an audience, we start to see the cracks of the relationship as it seems Mark is not worried and annoyed at Vanessa for doing this so early. When really, he is just nervous and not ready for a baby. He is too immature to be a father and at the start, we interpret that as a "laid back, edgy guy." Dialogue proves to us that first impressions should be dismissive and should not be taken seriously, because more often than not, they are not accurate.

It would be good to have a third body paragraph that discusses another technique that works with these techniques to present the idea of appearance vs reality.

In conclusion, I believe that Vanessa and Mark's relationship in Juno was very important as it taught us not to rely on first impressions. Why do you think this would be a relevant idea for the target audience to think about? Jason Reitman used visual features of camera shots and verbal features of dialogue to achieve this.

Pretty please leave suggestions!

I hope my comments are helpful
All the best,
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Posted: 2 Nov 11 (21:56)    Post subject:

popopopo wrote:
hi i wrote an essay on the question
Describe at least ONE character or individual you enjoyed reading about in the text(s).
Explain why the character(s) or individual(s) helped you understand an idea in the text(s).

wondering if you could check and reply.

Hi popopopo

I am having a look at your essays now,
Et8

ps. do i need to write another para to get higher than achieved?

You have definitely discussed the friendship between Lennie and George in detail in both essays but you have not explained what its purpose is in the novel
if so can you also check my other essay
thanks


would you recommend the 5 or 4 para essay? either is fine
and is it alrite if i post the essay again but with improvements




Sorry, to give other students a chance we are unable to re-mark essays on Studyit – see 8 and 9 in Level 1 English forum
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Posted: 3 Nov 11 (16:26)    Post subject: essay to check

Can you please check the attached essay.
I would like some feed back on how I could improve this to try and get excellent. As well as is the last paragraph a good idea to have or not?

Looking at it now ET5

Comments attached. You really need to focus on the question through the essay
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Posted: 3 Nov 11 (21:42)    Post subject: Hunger Games Essay

Hey ETs. Could you please check my essay? Also, how can I improve it to get excellence? Thanks. The question is:

Describe at least one character or individual from whom you learned something in the text. Explain why you learned something from the character or individual in the text.

Here is my essay

Hi there Ninja QK

You need to clearly differentiate when you are talking about the title of the book (speech marks needed) and the games in the book.

You clearly know the text well, however, you also need to make sure that you answer the question set as in this case you have described in detail what Katniss does but not her character and you have also explained what you learned but the question asks you to explain why you learned it.

All the best,
ET8


In The Hunger Games by Suzanne Collins, the main character, Katniss Everdeen, taught me that you should stick up for what you believe in.

Katniss is a sixteen year old girl living with her family in District 12 of Panem, the poorest, least populated district “where you can starve to death in safety?. Katniss has had a very difficult life but her intelligence and resourcefulness has kept her, her mother and her younger sister, Prim, alive. Before The Hunger Games, Katniss regularly broke the law by venturing into the woods to hunt for food. She “could be shot on a daily basis for hunting, but the appetites of those in charge protect? her.

Throughout The Hunger Games Katniss stood up for what she believed in as she committed acts of rebellion against the Capitol because she thought they were abusing their power.The purpose of The Hunger Games is to show the Capitol’s power over Panem. As Katniss said, “Taking the kids from our districts, forcing them to kill one another while we watch - this is the Capitol's way of reminding us how totally we are at their mercy. How little chance we would stand of surviving another rebellion. Whatever words they use, the real message is clear... ‘If you lift a finger, we will destroy every last one of you. Just as we did in District Thirteen.’? Katniss does not agree with the way in which the Capitol runs Panem and during The Hunger Games she wants to “show the Capitol that whatever they do or force us to do there is a part of every tribute they can't own?.

After the death of Katniss’ District 11 ally, Rue, she decides to place flowers all over the girl’s body. She then gave her the same farewell that all of District twelve gave Katniss when she left for the games, by placing the three middle fingers of the left hand to her lips, then lifting her arm out toward Rue. This represented her appreciation for Rue and showed that she was an actual person worthy of dignity, respect and appreciation,rather than just a part of the Capitol’s entertainment. This was considered an act of rebellion by the Capitol as it showed that they did not have complete control of the contestants, so it was censored out from the summary video of The Hunger Games.

A similar act of rebellion occurred at the end of The Hunger Games when Katniss and the other tribute from District thirteen, Peeta, faked a double suicide attempt. As Katniss explained, “Without a victor, the whole thing would blow up in the Gamemakers’ faces. They’d have failed the Capitol?. The Gamemakers changed the rules again to allow both Katniss and Peeta to win. The Hunger Games ended with the Capitol angry at Katniss for her acts of rebellion as she stood up for what she believed in – that the capitol should not have control of all of Panem in the way that they do.

Katniss’ acts of rebellion against the Capitol can be related to the rebel fighters in Libya, who fought against Gaddafi. Like Katniss in The Hunger Games, they did not like the way they were being treated and how Libya was being run, so stood up for themselves and fought back. Their rebellion paid off for them as Gaddafi was killed and they now have more freedom and will have a say in how their country is run.

In The Hunger Games by Suzanne Collins, Katniss rebelled against how the Capitol were abusing their power over Panem. Katniss’ actions showed me that you should stand up for what you believe in, like the rebels did against Gaddafi in Libya.
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Posted: 4 Nov 11 (13:31)    Post subject: English

Hi,could you please have a look at my essay for me and give me tips on how I could improve it.

Thanks

Hi there yeahbuddy

Welcome to Studyit

You are on the right track with this essay. You say that the idea in the text is bioethics, however, you do not explain what exactly the book's message about them is - are they good or bad?

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Posted: 4 Nov 11 (18:32)    Post subject: essay

Please give me feedback on this essay

thanks


Hi there dancing_diva

You clearly know the text well so you could certainly use ideas you have discussed in this essay in another question in the final exam.

You have attempted to provide a discussion of relevance of ideas in the text beyond the book itself, however, these discussions need further development.

All the best,
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dancing_diva



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Posted: 4 Nov 11 (19:26)    Post subject: Re: essay

Also I wanted to know if the essay that I wrote could be changed a bit (intro, opening sentences and conclusion) if the essay questions are for idea or character.



Thanks

Kia ora dancing_diva

ET8 has given you positive advice. It is best to start with a fresh intro, sentence and conclusion so that you are most certainly addressing the question in front of you and not the one that you wanted to be in front of you. Try writing introductions and conclusions to lots of different questions to build up your confidence.

ET
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Posted: 5 Nov 11 (11:50)    Post subject: Animal farm by George Orwell

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90849 (AS 1.1) Describe at least ONE idea in the text(s) that you found interesting.
Explain why you found the idea(s) interesting


The novel 'Animal Farm' written by George Orwell deals with many ideas. One important idea in the novel is the abuse of power. Napoleon a dictator of the farm represents Josef Stalin of out time. This idea leads to treating the less fortunate badly, keeping the masses ignorant and no education. Napoleon is shown in the novel as a corrupted leader and gains power and support through propaganda.

Napoleon treats the less fortunate badly by giving insufficient food and making the animals do work from morning till night. For example, Boxer a dedicated worker and follower of Napoleon only has two mottos; 'Comrade Napoleon is always right' and 'I will work harder.' When Boxer was injured from rebuilding the windmill, he was layer to rest and heal in the barn until the knackers were called in. Napoleon sends Boxer to the knackers, so that he could get money from it. This shows the abuse of power and corruption to a leader. He could also be described as a cold blooded murderer bye arming every last bit of money of Boxer, so that alcohol was supplied to the pigs.

Another act of a corrupted leader is not educating the animals. Napoleon does this so animals of the farm can stay ignorant and not knowing what was happening. He does this by stopping the education group from the beginning of the novel. After snowball was expelled, Napoleon used squealer to spread propaganda. In result of on education and keeping the masses ignorant Napoleon got his way. A example of this is changing of the seven commandments; 'No animal shall kill another animal with out cause' but the last three words were not there before the change. Napoleon uses this as an excuse to kill the sheeps, ducks and chickens that were against him. He blamed it on Snowball for having these 'traitors working for him'

Napoleon also took away seven puppies at a young age and told their mother that 'I will be responsible for their education.' He does this so that the dogs were raised up to be on Napoleons side and being told lies and propaganda at a young age. The young dogs became Napoleons secret police and body guards. In our time Stalin used secret police to take out people and they were known as the KGB.

We can link this novel and the idea to our lives and our time. In the 1930's 40's and 50's the Soviet Union (Communist Russia) was under a totalitarian regime and Josef Stalin was the leader and dictator. George Orwell intended the idea of the abuse of power that foreshadows in the novel. Other dictators were Hitler, Mugabe and others. The character Napoleon, was reflected as Josef Stalin and Farmer Jones was based on the tsar or kind of Russia at that time.

I found this idea interesting because it showed how power can corrupt a leader and cause the abuse of power. In this novel it clearly demonstrates that to much power can corrupt a leader into doing selfish acts and not thinking about others. It was all based on a real life situation that was happening in the Soviet Union and even nowadays it is still happening like in Zimbabwe. The power of propaganda was shown in this novel clearly and its effect on the animals. Napoleon kept them ignorant because of no education and the constant spread of propaganda. The acts of a leader was selfish and cold blooded in this novel. It is also interesting because George Orwell had experienced what a dictator can do to the people and how communism doesn't work.

In conclusion the novel 'Animal Farm' written by George Orwell is based on the idea of corruption and the abuse of power. It showed us that it causes treating the less fortunate badly, not educating the masses and keeping the masses ignorant with propaganda and lies for manipulation. George Orwell saw what was happening in Russia because of communism and corruption and he wanted us to realize if we carry on doing what we do, this is whats going to happen.

Hi, this is my essay on Animal Farm by George Orwell. Any comments or improvements or mistakes i have made would be great and also way you think of my essay.

Thank you.
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voldemortz



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Posted: 5 Nov 11 (15:32)    Post subject: poem essay

Hi English teachers
Can you please check my essay and give me some feedback.
Also if you can tell me if I have 1. related to the writer's purpose 2. maturely appreciated the significance/importance of the aspect described in the text as a whole 3. responded by developing beyond the text to include reference to wider society 4. responded with a perceptive case sustained idea with a structure and expression that shows flair/originality
it would be really helpful as I want to ensure that I have covered those points and if I haven't can you please tell me how I can do it.

Kia ora voldemortz

Sounds like you are aiming high.

Your essay is attached now with comments.

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Thank you very much
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Posted: 5 Nov 11 (16:49)    Post subject: 'Societal and Universal Level' Discussion in Responses

Hi English Teachers,

For the majority of my essays/responses this year (for the film and book) I have taken the explanation of my idea to a more universal level. However, one of my teachers told me that "societal and universal level" discussions can take the focus away from the text therefore risking a Not Achieved grade.

For example, if the idea was 'how our faith can be lost in the face of adversity' would it be appropriate to relate this to the faith of the victims of Christchurch earthquake?

I thought that at Excellence level, we are suppose to move 'beyond the text' to show perceptive and insightful understanding.

What is your advice on this matter?

Kia ora Doctor
You are both correct. Yes, go beyond the text but in a way that is a logical and meaningful link. If the Christchurch eg fits with your text then use it. Spend some time making a valid connection and it could really show maturity and insight. Check with the national exemplars to see how other students do this successfuly.
ET

Thanks
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Posted: 6 Nov 11 (9:01)    Post subject: essay.

Hi ET's!
Can you please have a look at my essay on the poem "Sad Joke on a Marae" by Apirana Taylor and tell me what I can improve on to possibly get an E.
Things that I am not really sure on are stuff like how to answer the second part of the question properly, so some tips on that would be greatly appreciated.

Thanks in advance!

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Posted: 6 Nov 11 (13:22)    Post subject: English

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Describe at least ONE character or individual you enjoyed reading about in the text(s).

A character that I like in the novel “Tomorrow in the war began? by John Marsden is Homer because he is full of surprises and in the beginning of the book he is a prankster. Then he becomes a serious leader, then we will find out that he has feelings.

In the beginning of this novel Homer is described as a reckless boy that likes to play “Greek roulette? and steal ladders leaving men stranded on a roof. But this all changes when they come back from their camping trip because he becomes a good leader that thinks ahead about the consequences “I think we should split up because we can cover more ground in small groups plus its better if only two people are caught instead of seven? this shows that he is a good leader because he is always prepared for the worst and also two of the three groups nearly got caught if it was all seven of them being chased they would have been much slower and got caught.

The next reason why I like homer is because he isn’t a one trick man because he starts to develop feelings for fi this is show when he ask Ellie “if she know if fi likes me? this shows that it is only a recent fantasy because he is being cautious about it by only saying likes instead of loves he is also asking a good friend to him and to fi. I think that homer is being very brave because fi is a townie and why would she settle for a plain old farm boy. Having a romance in their situation could be very stressful because they could break up and then they will still be next to each other because they can’t exactly go home.

In conclusion the character I like is homer because he takes up the tough job of being a leader, when no one else does and that he still tries to do some normal things that teens do, even though they are in the middle of an invasion.
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voldemortz



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Posted: 6 Nov 11 (14:32)    Post subject:

I'm Sorry, the question for the essay that I posted earlier was: Describe at least one language feature and explain how it helped you to understand an idea.

Also can you please tell me how I can discuss structure in my essay, should I not use quotes and merely describe how it was structured? Any additional feedback would also be helpful
thank you
Structure - you could discuss the development of the tension; maybe differrent narrative voices are heard; there could be flashback, flash forwards; are htere different time settings; sometimes use contrast between different character's voices....
In poetry there may be a set structure of stanzas; maybe past and present contrasted; or a repetition of ideas or words at the start or finish ....


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